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My essay prompt is to write an expository essay about how wars impact people who fight them and the communities they are fought in, using the book I am the Clay, and the film The Korean War: Our Time In Hell, and another source.
Below is my essay. Tell me how i did, and if i cited correctly and all that. And any other tips or pointers you might have. ALSO I need help with a title.
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April 22, 13
English II
War is something that has been happening since just about the beginning of humanity. Over time, war has evolved with weapons, recourses, and technology, but one aspect remains the same. War impacts people. War impacts always impacts the world in some way. War impacts the people who fight them, the people who witness them, and the communities in which they are fought by itâs deaths, heartbreaking reality, and its turmoil.
People who fight in wars like soldiers, generals, and pilots are people just as just as everyone else, just as your mother or the girl who checks you out at the grocery store. Most of them have families back home waiting for their return. But sadly, a lot of them never make it home. 36,516 American soldiers died in the Korean War alone. That is 36,516 fathers, sons, grandfathers, or lovers that are never coming back. Think of how greatly this can affect the world. One person can change the world. The smallest of events can lead to something life changing. Just think of all the people you have met and how even a seemingly insignificant way someone can impact your life so definitely. When people are dying it is a terrible juncture that brings people to times of sadness, worry, and for some, prayer. Just before the Battle of Inchon, General Douglas MacArthur says, âPlease stand with me while we recite the Lordâs Prayerâ (The Korean War: Our Time In Hell). War has people scared and worried, asking for Godâs will to be done, asking for strength. God knows it is needed.
Not only does war impact the people that fight them, but it also impacts the people who witness them. Most people have seen a photograph or a film or at least heard about the devastation of warfare. In Phil de Haanâs article â50 Years & Countingâ he refers to photographer Max Desforâs experience of witnessing and photographing the aftermath of a gun battle in Seoul. Desfor says âA mother was awkwardly sprawled in death on the side of the road. Alongside her were her two children, crying and bewildered.â (Haan). Desfor later went on to win a Pulitzer-prize in 1951 for a picture of civilians striving to cross one of the wrecked bridges as they fled south. Witnessing and capturing the horrible events of war is something that, while terrible, is beautiful and heartbreaking.
Possibly more than anything else, war impacts the communities in which they are fought. In Chaim Potokâs novel I Am the Clay, he reflects the hardship of three characters caught by the horror of war. One character is retuning to his home village after being forced to vacate due to the attacks that were destroying his home. Upon seeing his home, the boy does and thinks this, âHe walked back and forth, dazed: Where was his mother⦠Here and there remnants of a house as part of a shanty⦠Is this my village?â (Potok 199). This boy lost his family, his friends, and his home because of war. War impacted this boy completely and irreparably.
Through out time war has been one thing that seems to continue. Some form of war has been happening ever since humanity has had something they thought to be worthy of a fight. Whether it be by firing a gun, taking or seeing a picture, or having you family and village taken from you, war impacts in grievous ways.
Works Cited
Haan de, Phil. â50 Years and Counting.â Calvin. Calvin College, May 2002. Web. 11 April 2013. < http://www.calvin.edu/news/2001-02/korea.htm>
The Korean War: Our Time In Hell. Wheeler, Chris. Discovery Channel, 1997. Film.
Potok, Chaim. I Am the Clay. New York: Ballantine, 1992. Print.
Answer
Title -
Is Peace worth fighting for?
War or Peace?
Should one go to war over peace?
Your paragraphing is not clear, use a single line spacer between each.
Remember than you need to cite in some form, at the time (either at the end/during a quote OR as a Footnote numbered) as well as in the Reference/Bibliography.
You give numbers for the numbers of soldiers killed - but that info is not In Text cited.
You then list the males killed - What about all the females, don't they deserve a mention?
You quote Douglas MacArthur, but no date.
Haanâs article â50 Years & Countingâ - no date.
'.... crying and bewildered.â (Haan). - no date
'Desfor says âA mother was ....' but you cite Haan (no date) - you should either cite Max Desfor or say something like, ' Haan quotes Desfor as stating ....' (date).
' I Am the Clay,' - no date.
The citation (Potok 199) should be at the first mention of the book, not the second.
*Hope that you'll find this helpful.
Title -
Is Peace worth fighting for?
War or Peace?
Should one go to war over peace?
Your paragraphing is not clear, use a single line spacer between each.
Remember than you need to cite in some form, at the time (either at the end/during a quote OR as a Footnote numbered) as well as in the Reference/Bibliography.
You give numbers for the numbers of soldiers killed - but that info is not In Text cited.
You then list the males killed - What about all the females, don't they deserve a mention?
You quote Douglas MacArthur, but no date.
Haanâs article â50 Years & Countingâ - no date.
'.... crying and bewildered.â (Haan). - no date
'Desfor says âA mother was ....' but you cite Haan (no date) - you should either cite Max Desfor or say something like, ' Haan quotes Desfor as stating ....' (date).
' I Am the Clay,' - no date.
The citation (Potok 199) should be at the first mention of the book, not the second.
*Hope that you'll find this helpful.
Can anyone actually explain the financial crisis causes and effects in a good explanation?
Q. The news doesn't cover the whole story it just covers the day to day stuff.
Answer
We know that all institutions that own mortgages are in trouble because of the fall in housing prices meant there are many mortgages larger than the market value of the house. This is the reason people do not just to sell their house instead of let the banks foreclose. We know that house prices are falling because they rose rapidly between 2003 and 2006, and got so expensive that almost no one could afford to buy.
http://latimesblogs.latimes.com/laland/2008/09/credit-suisse-h.html
It is not that unusual for temporary unsustainable increase in the prices of assets to happen. We saw a similar event in the stock market in the late 90's, the dot com bubble. There are a lot of explanations about why this happened now in housing, and none of them are convincing, I think it may be due to some distortion in the economy that caused too much money from foreign investors available and no other segment of the economy was growing to soak up the money,
The result was people no longer trusted banks, money market funds, etc because no one is sure how risky their holding are, so people with more than $100,000 are searching for safe places to put their money, like US bonds, and banks are reluctant to make new loans, so it has become difficult to get credit. Here is the summery for what happened in september.
http://www.visualizingeconomics.com/2008/10/02/anatomy-of-a-financial-crisis-september-2008/
We know that all institutions that own mortgages are in trouble because of the fall in housing prices meant there are many mortgages larger than the market value of the house. This is the reason people do not just to sell their house instead of let the banks foreclose. We know that house prices are falling because they rose rapidly between 2003 and 2006, and got so expensive that almost no one could afford to buy.
http://latimesblogs.latimes.com/laland/2008/09/credit-suisse-h.html
It is not that unusual for temporary unsustainable increase in the prices of assets to happen. We saw a similar event in the stock market in the late 90's, the dot com bubble. There are a lot of explanations about why this happened now in housing, and none of them are convincing, I think it may be due to some distortion in the economy that caused too much money from foreign investors available and no other segment of the economy was growing to soak up the money,
The result was people no longer trusted banks, money market funds, etc because no one is sure how risky their holding are, so people with more than $100,000 are searching for safe places to put their money, like US bonds, and banks are reluctant to make new loans, so it has become difficult to get credit. Here is the summery for what happened in september.
http://www.visualizingeconomics.com/2008/10/02/anatomy-of-a-financial-crisis-september-2008/
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